xxbellaitalianaxx
Posts : 10 Join date : 2009-04-01 Age : 34 Location : Brentwood, TN
| Subject: poetry that deserves no title...... 4/1/2009, 1:36 am | |
| beautiful meaningless words...... like a soft caress.... sweetly whispered....
BANG! BANG!
Shot down.....by the bullet of destruction... lies and bullshit...... seeping in....like a predator stalking its prey.
pulling me under.... down down into the deep abyss that leads nowhere, but my heart.....
my heart cant breathe...
no air....
gasping for the right words... words to make you not leave.... to not walk away..
but you really got it good dontcha?
feeding me bull... blinded by the light......immune to ur shit.. your lies...
but thats all over now honey...
i have a weapon.... something so powerful you can never take it away...
my pride | |
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Posts : 16 Join date : 2009-03-27 Age : 38 Location : Columbia, TN
| Subject: Re: poetry that deserves no title...... 4/2/2009, 7:49 am | |
| I think that this is my favorite of what you've posted thus far. I think that it has the strongest impact, and a powerful closing. I look forward to reading more of your writing. | |
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xxbellaitalianaxx
Posts : 10 Join date : 2009-04-01 Age : 34 Location : Brentwood, TN
| Subject: Re: poetry that deserves no title...... 4/2/2009, 7:59 am | |
| thanks lol i couldnt think of a title i was sitting in creative writing and couldnt think of a title so i put that as my title i have more i will put up soon | |
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Admin Admin
Posts : 16 Join date : 2009-03-27 Age : 38 Location : Columbia, TN
| Subject: Re: poetry that deserves no title...... 4/2/2009, 8:06 am | |
| Sounds good. I rather like the title, almost like he isn't even worth naming, like giving him a title would show some kind of respect, respect that he doesn't deserve. | |
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